Crit on crit: last week-Empty Vessel

There were a lot of suggestions made, most of which I agreed with. The best one was the sequence of the film, to break it up and match the actions, such as the scrubbing of my face with the scratching out of the words on the notepad. I was told my audio was terrible, which I already knew. It was suggested to take out the clip of me locking the door, and I did. I also got rid of the fades (Tommy)I changed the credits a bit, and like the look better. It was suggested that I begin in the bathroom, and that changed the whole tone of the film. I got rid of the music as well.

Self-crit-midterm final edit

I really took to heart the feedback given last week. I agreed that I should try to match actions back and forth in the sequence, so that it appeared as though the fight was a memory. I really wanted to take out all of the sound except her one line, but that line had too much presence in the background and it sounded terrible. I am pretty happy with the result, it is a lot better now. I think that the visuals are strong and I am glad I took out most of the dialogue.I know that my audio could still be somewhat better but it is much better than it was. I am glad that I did this project, I have been doing self-portraits for a long time in photo and it was a great challenge to take myself out of the comfort zone of stills, into video. The performative aspect of my photo pieces is the part that I have never let anyone see.

Final film: Talent

Image of location

Script

Opening scene:

Character crouching to the ground to light the lantern.
She then picks it up and sets off.
There will be cuts to her face and her surroundings.
(The lantern will serve as guide to not only her but the audience.)

She is traveling at a hurried pace, looking back constantly.

She stops after about 15 seconds of walking to consider where she should now go.
She decides upon the distant woods and gathers the lantern and her things and continues on.
When she reaches the outside of the woods she comes to a barbed wire fence, this is her last obstacle left to obtain her freedom from the mundane.

She awkwardly and slowly climbs over the fence tearing her shirt along the way.
She looks at her shirt almost discouraged, she regains her composure and continues on resolute.

We then have a full shot of her walking into the woods, not looking back and disappearing in its brush.

Production of Design Statement

The aesthetic choices will greatly influence the piece because being at night time will be meant to create an uneasy feeling for the viewer therefore allowing them to relate with the uneasiness of the character who is leaving her secure and familiar home to go out into the unknown. Our character will be a young woman who will be portraying this time of transition of wanting more than what has been built around her.

Woods are also metaphorical for the unknown and often are associated with the unexplored which causes anxiety.

Using the lantern is giving her an object of security something that she keeps with her and helps her see her way. It enables her to explore the unknown but does not control where she goes.

The lighting will provide more dramatic aesthetic added with her fleeing to convey a sense of urgency and secrecy.

1 sentence description

A girl attempting to run away from a place that is no longer her home to the woods which represent new possibilities of the unknown.