Crit on crit: last week-Empty Vessel

There were a lot of suggestions made, most of which I agreed with. The best one was the sequence of the film, to break it up and match the actions, such as the scrubbing of my face with the scratching out of the words on the notepad. I was told my audio was terrible, which I already knew. It was suggested to take out the clip of me locking the door, and I did. I also got rid of the fades (Tommy)I changed the credits a bit, and like the look better. It was suggested that I begin in the bathroom, and that changed the whole tone of the film. I got rid of the music as well.